A tip to improve your writing:
Use adverbs instead of adjectives.
Abstractly, this is simple. Difficult in practice. Instead of describing something’s attributes, you’re forced to either craft each sentence around a verb, or go the Bob Dylan route and turn your adjectives into nouns.
The benefit here is that you are no longer able to passively describe things. Instead, you must demonstrate through action.
AJ,
Shoot adverbs 🙂 – http://writetodone.com/2010/08/30/shoot-adverbs/